https://youtu.be/5nLiFI4zYQ0
From my last elevator pitch, I received a ton of positive feedback that I thought was important. I tried to incorporate this feedback into this second attempt at my elevator pitch. What stood out as the most important feedback I received was to start my hook with a short story or scenario, rather than just introducing myself. On top of this, I was talking too fast in my first pitch, and I attempted to slow it down for this attempt. That is a habit I have, and I tried to improve on this aspect, but definitely can improve even more. I found the feedback that I received to be very useful and insightful. All of the comments allowed me to improve my pitch, and help improve the chance for success for my idea and opportunity.
Based on the feedback, I tried to change the general outline of my elevator pitch. First and foremost, I tried to improve my hook. Initially, I simply introduced myself and my purpose. This time around, I utilized a scenario in order to better capture my audience's attention. Additionally, I tried to slow down my talking. Although I think I can improve more, I believe that I successfully talked at a slower rate compared to my first pitch. Other than that, I expanded on my problem and solution aspects of my pitch to get a better picture of my idea for the audience.
Hi Dylan,
ReplyDeleteIt is helpful to have multiple assignments that involve increasing the effectiveness of our elevator pitches. As you mentioned, this allows us the opportunity to improve items that we felt needed improvement, either from external feedback or from what we have learned since the first assignment. I think that you have continued to do well with your presentation, which is consistent, effective, and professional. I’m sure that it’ll improve further on the third pitch.
Hey Dylan,
ReplyDeleteAs noted by you in your own reflection I thought you did a better job with the execution of your pitch. You slowed down your talking, allowing me time to take in the information you were providing. Your hook also had me more interested than the first time around. If I would change anything about this pitch it the camera position you had. This detail would only matter if your pitch was meant to be viewed as a video, but if that were the case, it did distract me that the angle was crooked and the video was shot in portrait.